Sample revised text
Sample revised text as viewed on Hemingwayapp.com (click to expand):

Transcript of revised text
Hiring managers must keep competition files for at least two years. They don't need to submit them to the BC Public Service Agency.
This policy changed June 1, 2017.
Key improvements
- Revised text passes all Hemingway App readability tests.
- Readability score is grade 5. That's better than our target! Can you make it even clearer without compromising the clarity of the message?
- The phrase “competition files” is government jargon. We have not changed it because our target audience is government hiring managers, and the meaning will be clear to them
- Word count is now 29, less than half of the original text.
- The effective date of the change has been moved to the end. That information is less important than the changed policy
- The reason for the change has been omitted as it is not likely important to the audience. Is there other information that could be left out?
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