Plain Language Exercise Eleven Takeaways

Sample revised text as viewed on Hemingwayapp.com (click to expand):

Screenshot of the corrected exercise text displayed on hemingwayapp.com


Transcript of revised text:

Hiring managers no longer need to submit competition documents to confirm a hire.
 
Hiring managers must still keep competition documentation for at least two years.
 
This change came into effect June 1, 2017 as a result of client feedback.

Notice the following:

  • The new text passes all of the Hemingway App's tests and nothing is highlighted
  • The readability score has dropped to 7
  • The word count has dropped to 39 - nearly half of the original text!
  • The effective date of the change has been moved to the end as that information is less important than the changed policy itself

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